Jin Kazama

Character Name: Kazama Jin
Bloodline: none
Desired Starting Element: lightning
Desired Village: the village hidden in the mist
Age: 15
Desired Rank: chuunin
Appearance: avatar
Character Personality: jin is a bit of a pessimist, he always is very serious about things. he speaks intelligently, but is ignorant when it comes to proving himself as a shinobi, especially in battles. he has a deep sense of pride, so will never accept help from anyone, and so he decides to be alone. he is very quiet, and will only socialize with others if he has to. he would often study the people and scenary around him in a lot of detail to help himself learn. also, he has a demonic split personallity hidden within, only to be revealed at certain experiences...
background Info: Jin was born in a small village deep inland. though it wasn't a ninja village, his clan were excellent in hand to hand combat, and so, as an eight year old, he was finally accepted into the mashiman martial arts school,where he learnt the best of kazama style karate at such a young age. at that age, he was a jolly little kid, he had many peers, all his relatives was right next door, and led a care free life. we were near to the hidden mist village, which was in dire need of skilled shinobi at the time, since over 50 percent of their ninja population ran away. some representatives came from the...

...wheres your rp sample...youre applying for chuunin

the mist village to our one, in search of shinobi worthy of such a replacement, and so forced the young children to learn the arts of combat. they took the entire of the Kazama branch, acknowledging our strength, and some others as well. they said that, if the clan were to help them win a war of invasion, the clan would be free, and so, had no choice but to accept for valid reasons... jin was separated from his clan, all but one, the headmaster of the Kazama taijutsus. he taught jin for almost 5 years, when it was time for the invasion. by then, he was armed with several ninjutsu, given to him by the mist, as well as their signature weapon, the legendary zanbatou. then, something terrible happened, before the village set out, they were being invaded themselves, by two allied countries, namely leaf and sand. sadly, mist was terribly crushed by the combination,the entire village was dead, including the kage. since then, he was somehow put into a comma for a year, until he was 15. he finally awakens to this day in the village...
Rp sample: he had just got up, looking out the window from his single bedroom home, his arms proping his head as he took in the mist village. his face was tired looking, his muscles were sore from the rigorous taijutsu training the day before. suddenly, out of nowhere, a huge toad's leg stomped down half of the building he was in. he was in shock for a second, getting a little dreary from what had happened. at first he thought it was a dream, then the sudden movements of the giant toad springing away and scattering mass rubble and debri made him aware. his face got serious, as he tried to think of what had just happened. he saw outside as dozens of building close by were either demolished or burning to the ground. his face got serious, he slipped on his black jacket, and fled outside grabbing his blue hilted zanbatou. he ran through the village, as tears conjured up in his eyes, all of his family was nearby, the houses they lived in was wrecked. his head swooshed left and right, taking in the mass chaos. then, he was surrounded suddenly by 3 leaf village shinobi, he stopped in his tracks and raised his sword over his head. ''RAAAAAAAAH'' , he shouted, as he deftly swung it down, missing one of them,

then, horizontally in pure anger and fustration. but all was in vain, his tears poured down from his eyes as everywhere went silent. he still sliced it through the air, not hitting a single one. then he was hit in the head by one of then, who moved lightning fast as if he simply flickered, his fist rested on jin's forehead for a split second, then jin was bulleted away, ramming into a building of rubble, being knocked out.....

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Character Name: Kazama Jin
Bloodline: none
Desired Starting Element: lightning
Desired Village: the village hidden in the mist
Age: 15
Desired Rank: genin
Appearance: avatar
Character Personality: jin is a bit of a pessimist, he always is very serious about things. he speaks intelligently, but is ignorant when it comes to proving himself as a shinobi, especially in battles. he has a deep sense of pride, so will never accept help from anyone, and so he decides to be alone. he is very quiet, and will only socialize with others if he has to. he would often study the people and scenary around him in a lot of detail to help himself learn. also, he has a demonic split personallity hidden within, only to be revealed at certain experiences...
background Info: Jin was born in a small village deep inland. though it wasn't a ninja village, his clan were excellent in hand to hand combat, and so, as an eight year old, he was finally accepted into the mashiman martial arts school,where he learnt the best of kazama style karate at such a young age. at that age, he was a jolly little kid, he had many peers, all his relatives was right next door, and led a care free life. Then one night, the village was attacked by shinobi of the hidden leaf and sand villages, the ninja's had no problem in defeating them. But for what reason? Nobody knew, but when they came, the brutally killed the entire village except for one, jin Kazama. He was knocked unconscious and was thought of to be dead. Put into a comma for all that time, he awakens this day in the mist village at the age of 15....

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