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Kaosu Hasu

Post by Kaosu Hasu on Sat Jun 06, 2009 12:14 am

Character Name: Kaosu Hasu


Desired Bloodline: Kaguya (Tell me if I have to register it, I’m guessing not cause it’s a default clan)


Desired Starting Element: Earth


Desired Village: Kirigakure


Age: 17


Desired Rank: Chunin


Appearance:
Btw Kaosu is an Albino so that explains his appearance
Spoiler:


Character Personality: Kaosu has a cold, strong, and silent personality. But if someone does something to piss him off he gets furious. He also is the kind of person that's attack first and talk later. Kaosu's one weakness is to make friends, he is afraid that if a bond grows that all it will bring is pain.


Background Info: Kaosu was born into his village as a Kaguya, his powers were unawakened until when he was only the age of 9 and the enemy Shinobi attacked his house. They raped his mother and then killed his father, out of cruelty they forced Kaosu to either kill his own mother or be killed. His sanity broke as he screamed and everything faded to black. When he awoke from the slumber the Shinobi were dead and so was his mother. The bodies were full of what appeared to be large stab wounds. Sadness and insanity flooded him so he ran. Kaosu lived as an orphan in the streets of Kirigakure. Everybody shunned him and never knew of his potential. He was at the verge of death when a man saved him, gave him food and the essentials to live. This man realized that Kaosu had a gift...the gift of a Kaguya. So the man taught Kaosu the way of the Shinobi and by the time Kaosu was 14 he passed the Chunin exam. That night they celebrated but an assassin attacked the two. Kaosu and the man fought together with precision and perfect timing but it wasn't enough. The man sacrificed himself so that Kaosu could get an opening to kill the assassin. Kaosu once again used his unknown power of the Kaguya to kill the assassin but it was uncontrolled. He swore on the life of his only friend that he would learn to control the power of his thought to be curse. Kaosu has spent the last two years of his life trying to master his bloodline while secluding himself.


Rp sample: Rp sample: Kaosu stared at the assassin as he gouged the blade threw the man's heart. The old mans last word were "Kill him now!!! And never give up...". With the last of his chakra the man preformed an earth seal and the ground formed over the assassins legs. He fell to the ground cold as the assassin pulled the blade from the corpse and tried to free himself from the earthly prison. Kaosu was reminded threw anger of the night from his past. It boiled inside of him as he screamed and ran towards the attacker. Scythe like bones emerged threw his pale arms as he went berserk. After a minute of wreckless slashing the assassin was nothing but mangled flesh. Kaosu looked at what he had done. He screamed and then his vision faded black.


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Re: Kaosu Hasu

Post by Takimoto-kun on Sat Jun 06, 2009 6:45 am

I will deny this. You have some grammatical errors and punctuations, also I'd ask you to enlarge the RP sample a little bit and not repeat words too many times >.<

But if you want a second opinion let Seraphiel check.
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Re: Kaosu Hasu

Post by Seraph on Sat Jun 06, 2009 3:56 pm

A bit more on the Rp sample since youre applying for chuunin then ill approve
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